The Superhero Twirly Twins
The twins, Tim and Jim Twirl, were in the gardenand both of them were sitting really, really, still
Tim was kneeling next to the pond, staring at a frog in front of him, and Jim was crouched near some bushes, watching a spider spinning a large web.
They werent moving a muscle They werent blinking an eyelid And they were breathing so, so, quietly
TIM JIM yelled Mum from the kitchen. Come along now Were going to make a quick visit to see Aunt Crinklenose
Oh no, groaned Tim and Jim. Somehow the thought of visiting their auntie made them suddenly feel twitchy and jittery, and very, very, fidgety.
The frog hopped away and the spider scuttled into the bushes as Mum came stomping into the garden.
And please try to sit still today, Twirly Twins, pleaded Mrs. Twirl. You know how Aunt Crinklenose doesnt like any noise or mess in her house. And remember your manners - no slurping or chomping noises either, added Mrs. Twirl.
Oh no, groaned Tim and Jim.
Aunt Crinklenose was very surprised to see them. Oh dearie me she cried in horror, as she opened the door.
Quickly, she forced herself to smile. How lovely to see you she simpered. Do come in
Aunt Crinklenose served tea and cakes on flowery cups and plates.
Nice tea, said Tim, slurping from his cup.
Nime case, spluttered Jim, chomping through mouthfuls of cake.
Mum and Aunt Crinklenose sat on the edge of their chairs, and talked, and talked, and talked about how delicious the cakes wereand what pretty cups and plates And didnt the garden look lovely And what big, juicy apples And the weather has been so nice for the time of year
The Twirly Twins wriggled and yawned and stretched and sighed
Do you have any frogs in your garden said Tim suddenly, leaping up from his chair with excitement.
Or spiders cried Jim, springing up next to him. Big, fat, giant tarantulas
Oh, you must be very interested in nature said Aunt Crinklenose, with a sweet smile.
We just like creeping up on things and watching them, said Tim.
Sometimes we chase them and catch them said Jim.
Aunt Crinklenose shuddered and wrinkled up her nose.
But we are always very gentle with them, we dont harm them, and we always let them go, added Jim, with great sincerity.
But Aunt Crinklenose shuddered even more and went into the kitchen to get more tea.
Please try to sit still, hissed Mrs. Twirl. We wont be here very long - just for a few minutes. Imagine that your chairs are covered in glue and that your bottoms are stuck to the chairs
Okay, Mum, said the boys, cheerfully.
And if youre really good today, continued Mrs. Twirl, Ill get you a
Frog suggested Tim, his eyes wide.
Tarantula suggested Jim, his eyes even wider.
Suddenly a terrible scream came from the kitchen
Mrs. Twirl ran out to find Aunt Crinklenose standing on a chair, shaking and pointing at the floor.
M-m-m-mouse stammered Aunt Crinklenose.
A very frightened little gray mouse was crouched, trembling, under the chair.
Poor little thing, said Mrs. Twirl. Tim Jim Come and catch this mouse
Yes Please catch it Youre very good at catching things shrieked Aunt Crinklenose.
She was twirling round on the chair so fast, and shrieking so much, that Mrs. Twirl thought she would fall off at any moment.
But mum, the chairs covered in glue said Tim, with a wide grin on his face.
Covered in glue shrieked Aunt Crinklenose.
Come and help Aunt Crinklenose shouted Mrs. Twirl angrily to the two boys.
But mum, we cant, our bottoms are stuck to the chair grinned Jim.
Stuck to the chair screeched Aunt Crinklenose, even louder this time.
COME HERE AT ONCE bellowed Mrs. Twirl.
Suddenly the little mouse could no longer bear any more of this dreadful noise and scampered into the lounge.
Mouse cried Tim and Jim, jumping up.
On seeing the two boys, the mouse stopped very still and stared at them for a moment, as if wondering what to do. Suddenly she smiled, winked, did a little twirl and beckoned to Tim and Jim, as if to say Catch me if you can
Game on cried Tim.
Twirly Twins to the rescue cried Jim.
Oh no, groaned Mrs. Twirl, as the chase began.
When Tim finally managed to scoop up the little mouse and hold her safe and secure in his hands, Aunt Crinklenose shrieked Hooray and clapped her hands wildly. She was so glad they had caught the mouse that she had forgotten about the mess, and gave her nephews big hugs and sloppy kisses.
Mum, can we keep the mouse pleaded Tim, wiping lipstick off his face with his sleeve.
PLEEEASE whined Jim, also wiping his face with his sleeve.
Mrs. Twirl was so glad that Aunt Crinklenose had stopped screaming, that she agreed to let them keep the mouse. The Twirly Twins gave their mum big hugs and sloppy kisses and promised her they would sit still on the journey home.
Tim placed the mouse carefully in his top pocket. The mouse was so glad to be leaving Aunt Crinklenoses house that she blew Mum a kiss, as if to say
Hooray for the superhero Twirly Twins
And as they sat happily together, in the back of the car, Tim and Jim and the little gray mouse were all superheroes on the journey home.
I am now going to tell you how I would divide the text among the pages of the book.
A standard childrens picture book is 32 pages long, with the first few pages being the title page, copyright page, etc. The story itself usually starts at about page 5. So in my picture book I am beginning the actual text of the story on page 5. Then I am going to divide the text evenly between pages 5 and 32, and I will describe the illustrations for these pages. I would like some of the illustrations to be single pages, and some to be double spread illustrations.
The Superhero Twirly Twins
The twins, Tim and Jim Twirl, were in the gardenand both of them were sitting really, really, still
Tim was kneeling next to the pond, staring at a frog in front of him, and Jim was crouched near some bushes, watching a spider spinning a large web.
They werent moving a muscle They werent blinking an eyelid And they were breathing so, so, quietly
This text is on Page 5. It is the beginning of the story with the illustration next to it on Page 6.
The illustration shows the Twirly Twins in their garden, with Tom kneeling by the pond, watching a little frog, and Jim crouched near to a bush watching a spider spinning a web. The twins pet cat sits next to Jim and is crouched in a similar position to him, and is also watching the spider. The boys are aged about 4 or 5 years old. It is the season of fall and the colors of the leaves and berries on plants shows that it is this season. It is a warm, sunny day. The garden is full of different sorts of bushes and plants, and it is quite messy, as there are toys, bikes, etc scattered over the lawn. There is a large old apple tree with a makeshift swing hanging from the branches. There are some apples on the tree. The illustration should clearly show the expression on the faces of the two boys, showing them to be fully concentrating on their observations of the frog and the spider. The house is in the background of the picture and Mum can be seen in the house, taking some apples from a box and putting them into a basket with a ribbon on the handle.
TIM JIM yelled Mum from the kitchen. Come along now Were going to make a quick visit to see Aunt Crinklenose
Oh no, groaned Tim and Jim. Somehow the thought of visiting their auntie made them suddenly feel twitchy and jittery, and very, very, fidgety.
This text is on Page 7. The illustration, also on Page 7, shows Mum has opened the window and is calling to the two boys. It is the garden as before. The boys heads are now turned to look at Mrs. Twirl, so the reader can only see the back of their heads. The illustration could also suggest that the cat and the frog have heard Mums shout and have turned their heads to look, and the spider has also been startled by the shout.
The frog hopped away and the spider scuttled into the bushes as Mum came stomping into the garden.
And please try to sit still today, Twirly Twins, pleaded Mrs. Twirl. You know how Aunt Crinklenose doesnt like any noise or mess in her house. And remember your manners - no slurping or chomping noises either, added Mrs. Twirl.
Oh no, groaned Tim and Jim.
This text is on Page 8. The illustration is also on Page 8 and shows the frog leaping away and the spider running away, as Mum can be seen marching down the garden path to take the boys into the house. The cat is also speeding away in panic. The expression on the boys faces shows they are not pleased. They may have their arms folded and they are looking down at the ground, feeling very sorry for themselves.
Aunt Crinklenose was very surprised to see them. Oh dearie me she cried in horror, as she opened the door.
Quickly, she forced herself to smile. How lovely to see you she simpered. Do come in
This text is on Page 9, and the illustration is a double page spread on pages 9 and 10. It shows a beautiful garden, with neatly trimmed hedges and perfectly kept flower beds, etc. Tim and Jim have their backs to the reader, and are holding the basket of apples between them, and the picture shows that they are looking up at Aunt Crinklenoses face. Mum stands behind them, slightly to the side, also looking at Aunt Crinklenose, who looms large in her doorway, with her large nose crinkled into an expression of utter disgusthorror on her face. She is a large lady wearing a flowery dress and apron, and slippers. Her graying hair is tied into a neat bun, and she has silver spectacles.
Aunt Crinklenose served tea and cakes on flowery cups and plates.
Nice tea, said Tim, slurping from his cup.
Nime case, spluttered Jim, chomping through mouthfuls of cake.
This text is on Page 11, and the illustration, also on Page 11, shows a neat and old-fashioned living room, with flowery curtains, flowery patterned chairs, lots of vases of flowers, with everything very neatly arranged in the room. Aunt Crinklenose is carefully pouring tea for Mum, who sits on a chair. Tim and Jim have sat themselves on the floor, and as Tim slurps his tea, little drops of it splatter onto the cream colored carpet, while Jim is taking a large bite of cake, and the cake crumbs are spraying over the carpet too. There is a little mouse that nobody has seen, positioned behind one of the armchairs, nibbling on the cake crumbs dropped by Tim and Jim.
Mum and Aunt Crinklenose sat on the edge of their chairs, and talked, and talked, and talked about how delicious the cakes wereand what pretty cups and plates And didnt the garden look lovely And what big, juicy apples And the weather has been so nice for the time of year
The Twirly Twins wriggled and yawned and stretched and sighed
This text and illustration is on Page 12. It shows the same living room, with Mum and Aunt Crinklenose perched on the edge of their chairs, holding their tea and smiling sweetly at each other. The boys have the same dazed, bored, fed-up expressions on their faces. Tim is laying on the floor, on his front, up on his elbows with his chin supported by his hands, while Jim sits sprawled out in an armchair, his arms and legs outstretched, his head back. The mouse has picked up a larger piece of cake that has been dropped and is creeping towards the kitchen with the cake, unseen by everyone.
Do you have any frogs in your garden said Tim suddenly, leaping up from his chair with excitement.
Or spiders cried Jim, springing up next to him. Big, fat, giant tarantulas
Oh, you must be very interested in nature said Aunt Crinklenose, with a sweet smile.
We just like creeping up on things and watching them, said Tim.
Sometimes we chase them and catch them said Jim.
Aunt Crinklenose shuddered and wrinkled up her nose.
But we are always very gentle with them, we dont harm them, and we always let them go, added Jim, with great sincerity.
But Aunt Crinklenose shuddered even more and went into the kitchen to get more tea.
This text is on Pages 13 and 14, with the illustration as a double page spread. It shows the two boys standing next to each other, with happy, excited expressions on their faces. Jim is explaining to Aunt Crinklenose. They have very honest, open expressions as they look up at Aunt Crinklenose, who towers over them, crinkling up her nose, with a look of great displeasure on her face. The mouse cannot be seen in this illustration.
Please try to sit still, hissed Mrs. Twirl. We wont be here very long - just for a few minutes. Imagine that your chairs are covered in glue and that your bottoms are stuck to the chairs
Okay, Mum, said the boys, cheerfully.
And if youre really good today, continued Mrs. Twirl, Ill get you a
Frog suggested Tim, his eyes wide.
Tarantula suggested Jim, his eyes even wider.
This text is on Page 15. The illustration is a double page spread, Pages 15 and 16, and shows Mrs. Twirl looking quite serious as she talks to the two boys. It is still in the living room. She is sitting down and they are standing up next to each other, looking at each other with happy, excited expressions on their faces, and wide eyes, in contrast to Mrs. Twirls serious expression.
Suddenly a terrible scream came from the kitchen
This text is on Page 16.
Mrs. Twirl ran out to find Aunt Crinklenose standing on a chair, shaking and pointing at the floor.
M-m-m-mouse stammered Aunt Crinklenose.
A very frightened little gray mouse was crouched, trembling, under the chair.
Poor little thing, said Mrs. Twirl. Tim Jim Come and catch this mouse
Yes Please catch it Youre very good at catching things shrieked Aunt Crinklenose.
She was twirling round on the chair so fast, and shrieking so much, that Mrs. Twirl thought she would fall off at any moment.
This text is on Page 17. The illustration is a double page spread, over Pages 17 and 18.
It shows Aunt Crinklenose up on the kitchen chair with the teapot in her hand spilling drops of tea from it, as she stands shrieking. She has an expression of absolute fear. Mrs. Twirl looks up at her with a very worried expression. The mouse is crouched with her little hands covering her eyes, as if she doesnt want to see Aunt Crinklenose fall off the chair.
But mum, the chairs covered in glue said Tim, with a wide grin on his face.
Covered in glue shrieked Aunt Crinklenose.
Come and help Aunt Crinklenose shouted Mrs. Twirl angrily to the two boys.
But mum, we cant, our bottoms are stuck to the chair grinned Jim.
Stuck to the chair screeched Aunt Crinklenose, even louder this time.
COME HERE AT ONCE bellowed Mrs. Twirl.
This text is spread over Pages 19 and 20 with the illustration as a double page spread over Pages 19 and 20 also. It shows the scene as before, of Mrs. Twirl and Aunt Crinklenose, but in the background, and this time Mrs. Twirl is looking extremely angry as she shouts to the boys. Aunt Crinklenose has her mouth open, screaming, and the little mouse has her hands covering her ears this time. In the foreground, the boys are sprawled on the armchairs, with big, mischievous grins on their faces, as they pretend to be stuck to the chairs.
Suddenly the little mouse could no longer bear any more of this dreadful noise and scampered into the lounge.
Mouse cried Tim and Jim, jumping up.
This text is on Page 21. The illustration is on Page 22. It shows Tim and Jim jumping up in surprise at the mouse as she runs into the room.
On seeing the two boys, the mouse stopped very still and stared at them for a moment, as if wondering what to do. Suddenly she smiled, winked, did a little twirl and beckoned to Tim and Jim, as if to say Catch me if you can
Game on cried Tim.
Twirly Twins to the rescue cried Jim.
Oh no, groaned Mrs. Twirl, as the chase began.
This text is on Page 23 with the illustration on Page 24. The mouse winks and beckons to the twins to chase her as the twins look on with expressions of happy surprise. The reader can still see part of Aunt Crinklenose in the kitchen, still standing on the chair, while Mrs. Twirl peers round the door into the living room, with an anxious expression on her face.
Pages 24 and 25 do not have any text on them. They are a double spread illustration of the chase showing Tim and Jim chasing the mouse through Aunt Crinklenoses living room. This is a scene of absolute chaos - vases of flowers tipped over, pictures no longer straight on the walls, curtains half-hanging down, as the twins chase the mouse and try to catch her. The reader cannot see Mum or Aunt Crinklenose in these pages, it is only the chase that can be seen. The mouse has climbed up the curtain and is perched on the curtain rail, waving gleefully at Tim, who stands up on tiptoes on the table trying to reach her. Jim is illustrated as having slipped on the rug beneath him and is in mid-air about to fall to the floor.
When Tim finally managed to scoop up the little mouse and hold her safe and secure in his hands, Aunt Crinklenose shrieked Hooray and clapped her hands wildly. She was so glad they had caught the mouse that she had forgotten about the mess, and gave her nephews big hugs and sloppy kisses.
This text is on Page 26. The illustration is on Page 27. It shows Aunt Crinklenose looking very happy, and giving Tim a big lipsticky kiss on each cheek. It is now Tims turn to look disgusted and horrified. Jim looks on in disgust and horror too, while Mum stands smiling sweetly at the two boys.
Mum, can we keep the mouse pleaded Tim, wiping lipstick off his face with his sleeve.
PLEEEASE whined Jim, also wiping his face with his sleeve.
Mrs. Twirl was so glad that Aunt Crinklenose had stopped screaming, that she agreed to let them keep the mouse. The Twirly Twins gave their mum big hugs and sloppy kisses and promised her they would sit still on the journey home.
This text is on Page 28 and the illustration is on Page 29. The illustration shows Mum bending down to hug the twins, who are overjoyed to have the mouse as their pet, as shown by their gleeful expressions. The little mouse is on Tims shoulder with her hands held in the air as if cheering.
Tim placed the mouse carefully in his top pocket. The mouse was so glad to be leaving Aunt Crinklenoses house that she blew Mum a kiss, as if to say
Hooray for the superhero Twirly Twins
The text is on Page 30 and the illustration is on Page 31. It shows Tim standing on his own looking very happy, with the mouse in his top pocket. She is looking out and blowing a little kiss, so it looks as if she is blowing a kiss towards the reader.
And as they sat happily together, in the back of the car, Tim and Jim and the little gray mouse were all superheroes on the journey home.
This text and the illustration are on Page 32. It shows the two boys with their seat belts fastened, on the back seat of the car. The mouse is sitting, propped up on some cushions between them. She also has a little seat belt. The boys are holding a book between them so that the mouse can see it, and they are reading the story to her. They are all laughing at the illustrations in the story. The title of the book they are holding is Tom and Jerry.
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